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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #30 on: December 04, 2006, 08:58:00 PM »
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 your story just doesnt make much sense. why kill your friend and embrace you for no real reason after barely even meeting you? why would you hate him for that? why would an elder just up and kill him? What did he do to merit that? if it were a real crime, why didnt they send me (yes im the only hit-man, or at least the best)? all your killing indescriminatly like c-l said woulve brought the councils wrath down on you by now as well...it just doesnt hold together.                        

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #31 on: December 04, 2006, 09:14:00 PM »
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 im not saying anything about your skill there...
 
 and i never said anything about the crimes of my sire. like i said it could be a very personal thing.
 
 "why kill your friend and embrace you for no real reason after barely even meeting you?" sorry, i think that was lost in my trying to keep it short.... this is all unknown... i was hopping about using elizabeths sire as a character through the slights of other vampires when she meets them, remember she is nt to poplar.
 back story is always more fun when it starts coming out in the middle of a story... that and i was trying to keep it short.
 
 "ll your killing indiscriminately"... i thought i fixed that... hold on
 
 dude, she killed to people in the story. cl was complaining about my leaveing homeless peoples bodies around. no one would care if they dissapeared... cept the other homeless... and there just to scared.                        

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #32 on: December 04, 2006, 09:19:00 PM »
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 well you know theres appropriately vauge and then theres incoherently disjointed...im not trying to insult you im only saying your history is sort of hard to understand and the situations in it arent really probable....                        

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #33 on: December 04, 2006, 09:36:00 PM »
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 yeah sorry... i can re write it when ive got a bit more time... but it will be a few pages...
                       

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #34 on: December 04, 2006, 09:43:00 PM »
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 we dont need the complete biography! look at my history for example. its barely 4 paragraphs, but it gets the point across, no?                        

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #35 on: December 04, 2006, 10:05:00 PM »
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 mkay, fixed                        

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #36 on: December 05, 2006, 02:48:00 AM »
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 I see there has been some infighting here.
 While it's an interesting idea to keep things secret, I'd prefer if these secrets are doublechecked with me so they won't affect the story too much. Your history right now is a bit vague and I don't know what you have in mind.
 
 I'm not implying that you should make things up as you go along but it would be nice to know enough to understand your character and her motives. What I have now is a quiet vampire with a history hinting as something traumatic in the past.
 
 And I'm not sure about Miyo. Are you still out there?
 Scared you off, did I? Oh well... we can't have everything.
 Let me know, though. I could probably squeese you in after starting if you're hesitating but if you're sure wether or not you want to be a part of this, I'd like to know beforehand.                        

 

                                                  

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #37 on: December 05, 2006, 03:18:00 AM »
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 Well, she got a little traumatized by her childhood, she is now reclusive. then she ran away from all the attention her musical talents got her. she became closeish with mary, who was then killed, and she was framed for it, having blood all over her hands and what not, then she got gunned down.
 she ran away from her sire after he picked her up and then ended up finding jason, the one she just started to get along with, and panicked and killed him. she is at braking point.
 then someone (i dont mind it being Azreal's char, im just concerned about what he would do with Elizabeth).
 he then lets her mututilate/eat her sire after staking him(wanting to check this with you cl)
 she is then induced into vampire society, and after... i think i said 20 years? she discovers that she was framed for marys murder by the vampire that has put her up and brought her into vampire society. so she runs and create her own home.
 
 as to the elders... hay here is an idea, perhaps azreal and the elder show up and get her to help... that could work. t'would be a bold move...
 as to her sire though, basically he has been playing power games with the elder, and he was getting tired with him. Elizabeth was merely a pawn meant to frustrate him. (basically her sire was an anarchist that liked to get away with as much as he could)
 killing inocents, embracing with out permision, especualy if  the one you embrace is the perfect scape goat for the murder. the elders think they have cleared everything up, and then bam, she is dead... and wait she's a vampire. one to mr anarchist.
 he didnt count on them using her to find him, and got him. to bad for them.
 
 the interaction i had planed was bassicaly npc vamps being horrible to elizabeth about her sire... i hadnt given it much more thought                        

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #38 on: December 05, 2006, 06:14:00 AM »
                Name: Mallorie Du Coeur
 Sex: Female
 Age/Embrace: born 1927, embraced 1950 – age 23
 
 Appearance:
 
 Mallorie is of French descent, standing at a height of 5’7.  She has the look of a Japanese comic character, which is to say as thin as a twig.  She wears a pair of skin hugging jeans, a simple black sweater and a short wool trench coat.  Her brown hair is tied in a half-ponytail behind her.  Mallorie’s body, as compared with her peers, is of a smaller stature.  From a close distance, her ostensible innocence is betrayed by her eyes which open into tempestuous chaos.  Mallorie looks quite pleasant in general and would be even more so if she happened to smile normally once in a while.  The smile she does smile is one that leaves you wondering.
 
 Possessions:
    
 After her arrival in Hawkport, she managed to procure a small run down apartment in the Old Town district.  She has no mode of transportation therefore relying on public transportation which isn’t too much of a problem.  She always carries her butter knife (refer to history), which she hides on her body.  Her job at a run down bar pays moderately but money isn’t of great concern to her.  She also has income from the various individuals she likes to pickpocket while feeding.  
 
 Personality:
 
 Mallorie isn’t a particularly talkative one.  If diagnosed, she would most probably be labeled as of the cyclothymic and psychopathic suffering from psychosis.  She believes that there are eyes constantly watching her from the dark crevasses of the night.  Mallorie doesn’t come off as particular insane though like most psychopaths, can be somewhat charming at times.  
 
 Powers:  
 
 Similar to that of dementation/dominate as seen in Bloodlines.
 
 History:
 
 My life is a series of ill-omened occurrences entwined together to form a spider’s web of salvation.  
 
 A long time ago I was in two places.  Two places at once, yes.  Half of me was an egg, and the other half was squiggling in a testicle somewhere.  After a nice night at a restaurant of mediocre value, a morning of confusion, and nine months, I came into existence in the city of Newnan.  I never knew my father.  Apparently he was a nice man of handsome features.  He lost his life in the war.  It seemed a lot of the children on my block had fathers lost in wars with handsome features.  When they don’t come home, they can be anything you want them to be.
 
 For as long as I can remember, my mother worked at Macy’s as a clerk.  With her working hours, I spent many more hours at my grandparent’s home.  It wasn’t an ugly house.  It was the spitting image of the American dream; white picket fence and all.  I lived in the black and white of Pleasantville, desperately seeking the flowers of colour.  I found fruits.
 
 Spending so much time with the elderly opens the mind to new truths which can be defined as great secrets of life.  When my mind first became my own, I came to realize that the elderly had an uncanny ability to sponge the life-energy of the young and youthful.  Though this secret was quite clear to me, I endured their ostentatious displays of various treats, including the fondling of various erogenous zones.  This, however, took its tow on me as every time they were near, I felt as if a slice of the pie that was me was taken and consumed.  In the end, the treats did not make up for this loss.  In response to this, I was forced to take Lassie’s life.
 
 It was about then I stopped visiting my grandparents.  I went home to live with my sweet dear mother who still worked at Macy’s.  After the Pearl Harbor Day sales at the department store, she would come home with her feet blistered, her hands swollen and her hair a mess.  It was something the narcissism of me of which had extended onto her did not enjoy.  During this time of my teenage years, with my mother, I lived in a small shanty apartment.  I spent most of my day at school like a regular normal child, smoking in the girls’ room.  I’d spend the night at home sitting in front of the dinner table in the empty apartment with a cold meal waiting for mother to return.  She was ecstatic one night.  Ã¢â‚¬Å“Oh dear Mallie, how adorable this man is.  How I wish perhaps one day he’ll take us home,â€? she said to me one night.  Perhaps she had found her prince and that she did in the most peculiar species of the frog.  She brought the man home one day and he stayed.  He had fat on his neck.  He came home from the war and brought it with him.  When I turned twenty, mother died with a black eye.  The prince disappeared and I went to my grandparents’.  
 
 At my grandparents,’ who had aged into the almost deceased, my pie started disappeared once again.  I came home to find it gone, slice by slice taken by busy fingers until one day I took up the butter knife.  When I found fingers picking at my pie again, I engaged in the commencement of the ‘Danse Macabre’ where I showered my lovely grandparents with their own organs and genitalia.  
 
 With my life behind me, I wandered the streets doing odd-jobs, the majority of the time a blur of substances.  I found myself in the last few nights of my life.  The ceiling was potholed like that of my step-father’s face, the mattress smelled of my enuresis.  The filth was all around me in this quiet darkness, a silence that I could hear.  My hands and feet tied to the legs of the bed frame, I could only wait for whatever demons came to devour me.  When they came, my body became not of my own.  When they were gone, I became acutely aware of the man who looked at me from the closet.  There he stood motionless as if he were just a piece of the puzzle that was my consciousness. Unfaltering and unblinking, his eyes were persistent as though they had no eyelids.  I don’t know how many nights or how many days went by.  I felt my stomach grumble from the lack of food, I felt my stomach fade away into the silence.  In the end, the man never left me.
 
 When I finally opened my eyes, I was dead in the middle of a blood splattered room, lying in the filth of my own feces and urine.  Standing over my corpse was my savior, the man who never left my side.  Every night, we re-enacted the ritual of my death with his eyes always watching.  For nights at a time, I would be left out without the access of the precious liquid that sustained my unlife while he watched from the sanctuary of his closest.  
 
 Eventually, I grew tired of death and left Newnan.  
 
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 Hmm...  let me know if there's anything you'd like me to fix or clarify.                        

 

                                                  

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #39 on: December 05, 2006, 07:51:00 PM »
                lol is anyone in this rp going to be anything but quiet and reclusive?                        

 

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #40 on: December 05, 2006, 08:15:00 PM »
                NUh-uh!
 I'M gonna make character named Archie MAsters!(because that way he combines the overwhelming carrot top  perv kid from the 50's charisma with the ghostly coolnes of Vlad Masters from Danny Phantom!)
 He's gonna be a big black man that will want to hunt vampires to prove to the "dawgs in the 'hood he's one mean nigga" (and also because he saw blade 3) by takin down a vampire!(Or so he be believin!) with a katanna n a "piece"!
 And he'll always be braggin ta "da bitchez that no frickin vampire is gonna take this brother down cuz they re all lounly goth crackerz with capes,reZpect yo!"                        

 

                                                  

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #41 on: December 05, 2006, 09:12:00 PM »
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 *takes a picture of gostro and draws a big red crosshair on his forhead* anything you say, hunter....touch a vampire and i'll soon come for you.                        

 

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« Reply #42 on: December 05, 2006, 10:21:00 PM »
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 It's that strong, silent thing. It's "cool".                        

 

                                                  

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Re: Covering Tracks Discussion
« Reply #43 on: December 05, 2006, 10:23:00 PM »
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 oh...i dont usually do it, and im cool as hell though...i guess thats just me...                        

 

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« Reply #44 on: December 05, 2006, 10:40:00 PM »
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 elizabeth isnt nessasarily strong... but she does what she needs to do... and will probably brake down every now and again... or just snap.                        

 

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